Dear Ms Hopkins,
I came across one of your articles in my English lesson. Funny that, because in your piece you talk a lot about England. But you seem to enjoy disrespecting other people who are not fully English. I am black Caribbean and you need to understand that my ancestors have already gone through adversity in history to assert our rights to live on equal terms with everybody else. Additionally, without all of us “cockroaches”, as you call us, England – especially London – wouldn’t be the multicultural hub it is right now. Regardless if you get paid for it or not, I am quite frankly astonished that you think it’s all right to write stuff like that on your blog. When we had the Second World War, who helped build London back up and make it a better place for yourself and the next generation ? Secondly, we all know if it was a “coloured” person writing the same prejudiced views and you were just an ordinary citizen reading them, for example in the newspaper, you would think that it was very disrespectful and you would take action over it. Thirdly, immigrants contribute far more to the economy than they take away in benefits: there are more people claiming unemployment benefit in Hodgehill and Ladywood (two Birmingham constituencies) than Polish people getting the dole in the whole of the United Kingdom. You need to understand that London is a multi – racial culturally diverse place and that is the key reason for its success.
Growing up in London and going to school here, you learn not to look at any one differently- it doesn’t matter what skin colour or race you are. As we know you have a family: now how would you feel if London was for example Africa and Africa was London and you wanted to go there to get a good job so your kids could get a good education? You need to look at things from another perspective and understand the backgrounds of other people’s ethnicity, and why they would want to come to the UK.
“NO, I don’t care. Show me pictures of coffins, show me bodies floating in water, play violins and show me skinny people looking sad. I still don’t care.” What this quote illustrates is that you have no respect for the human race other than yourself or (white) British people .“Watching them try to clamber on to British lorries and steal their way into the UK, do I feel pity? Only for the British drivers, who get hit with a fine every time one of this plague of feral humans ends up in their truck.” This is sickening to read because there are people dying and you show no emotion, and all they are trying to do is come to the UK and make a better life for themselves. When you refer to immigrants as swarms, feral and cockroaches, you are not just cold hearted, you are being racist.
Your article reads as though you have done no research whatsoever into the very real contribution that migrants have given to Britain not just now but through the history of the British Empire. The Economist found that ‘in 1995 and 2011 the migrants made a positive contribution of more than £4 billion ($6.4 billion) to Britain, compared with an overall negative contribution of £591 billion for native Britons,’ and from 2001-11 Eastern European immigrants gave back £5 billion. The NHS would be on its knees without overseas doctors; but at the same time you should know that research has found no meaningful impact on unemployment in the UK as a result of immigration. The UK had fewer applications for asylum in 2015 than six other EU countries. And finally there are 610,00 empty homes in the UK that we could open up to refugees from war torn countries.You need to look at the reality of immigration in the UK. It is as though you live in a bubble completely cut off from the outside world. I recommend you to go round and see the type of state these migrants live in and then compare it to your own.
Yours sincerely,
Makai Byrne

February 18, 2016 at 10:16 am
Hi Makai,
Some feedback:
1) Keep to one idea per paragraph. Start with the idea of historical injustice and then move on. You have tried to put all your ideas in the first paragraph.
2) Make sure the spelling and punctuation throughout the piece is accurate. It isn’t at the moment!
March 20, 2016 at 11:32 am
Hi Makai,
This is currently at 30/40 (C1). A B is one mark away.
To improve, you need to address this main issue:
1) The first paragraph needs to be divided into other paragraphs. You try and put all the ideas into one paragraph in the beginning!